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I didnt know how to finish it...so the ending not so great... (hes watching u...)
Soft air cradels me
its embrace ever so gentle
ever so peaceful in this world of darkness
shaking the world of lonliness
shadows cross from the world below
sunlight bleeds into black
stillness takes ahold
shaking me acold
i feel im falling to the dead world below
Numbness chokes the happiness
dread kills the quiet
I scream but no one hears
i cry but no one cares
when did i become so cold?
when did i start to feel so old?
i lay crumpled and broken
holding on to the distant light of salvation
the mirrors seep black
i would do anything to take this all back.
What happened to the times when nothing mattered
what made them so worn and tattered?
Why do the dreams fall ever so silent? |
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Posted by xmidnightxwingsx on 2008-07-09 02:10:54 | Rating: | Views: 115
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delete the spammer above nova. fuckin idiot.
nova, be strong. try to fight falling down that hole. just kick your feet as hard as you can. and just keep kickin.
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Posted by Slash
on 2008-07-09 09:24:50
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SPAMS!!!!!!aargh.
Anyway, slash is right.Don't ever stop fighting!!
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Posted by HardThinker
on 2008-07-09 09:47:29
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grr spammers, GRRRR!! be very afraid!!
ahem. anyways...
hey u said u couldnt write!!! i beg to differ!
well, lemme tell ya, screaming wont get u anywhere. cuz u know how in a nightmare whenever u try to scream it just comes out weak and pathetic? and dont cry unless u want to be pitied. u want help, and if someone REALLY cares, theyll come to u. like the ppl on thoughts have. u have to stay strong and fight on ur own bcuz anyone CAN, its just hard. and the good ppl who care, like those couple of close buds, theyll help u out as best they can if they rly want to. and if they dont thats their problem. dont u DARE take it out on urself. k? stay strong girl, u can do it.
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Posted by Hunterrrrxisxamazing
on 2008-07-09 11:51:49
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YOu can write really well.
You need to fight. I know how you feel. Sometimes it seems like my daytime life is a nightmare.
I hate nightmares.
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Posted by Emmy
on 2008-07-09 16:13:20
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There is nothing wrong with your ending. This poem is beautiful. You have alot of good advice here. Keep fighting. I know how hard it is. I feel like I am fighting all the time. It can be exhausting.
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Posted by Faith
on 2008-07-09 16:38:46
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You're extremely talented with words. You've expressed yourself amazingly well.
We're all here for you nova, we're all your friends, and we're here to give you that push towards the light. You're not alone...
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Posted by angelwings
on 2008-07-10 02:03:30
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This was great really and truely! you words are so clear for those who understand all to well!!! keep doing your thing!!!
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Posted by jessfreethinkin
on 2008-07-10 17:12:18
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