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add ur peace to my poem
I search deep with in my sole
Hoping that the answer lies within
Without knowing the search that is about to begin

Why must I impede all who come near?
Aren’t a hearts walls worse than a frontier
Why must I hurt those whom I hold deer?
Should they even continue to preserver?
They will find nothing more than the pioneer
An empty place.




im stuck in this part and was wondering if any off u can help me with what to add
if u do i whoud truedly thnx u if not then plz try to coment me on how it is so far thnx
Posted by whatonlyisee on 2008-04-01 19:30:00 | Rating: | Views: 160


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Posted by
Jasmine16
on 2008-04-28 11:43:28
 
Were my soul remains.
I want to hold everyone close and not let go.
I never ment to hurt you, but it seems I have.
I want to shout out im sorry.
But all I hear in return is my echo.
I cry without stop.
 
 

Posted by
Jasmine16
on 2008-04-28 11:43:51
 
I hope I helped. Your poem is good so far.
 
 

Posted by
yadokta
on 2008-06-04 17:51:04
 
find nothing more than the pioneer.
Or the end to a long and lonely peer? No mabe not...
 
 


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