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I know it's been forever, but I felt the need to do some scribbling. So here's my response to Scribble Challenge #48.


     John's eyes strained across the small room with fierce determination. For being only ten feet away, the lines were barely visible to his eyes. And, it seemed, the harder he tried to focus on them, the more difficult it became. 18... 19... 20...

     "20 vertical and 42 horizontal," he whispered as a wave of triumph passed over him. But it quickly passed as he glanced at his quivering hands. Trying to force them to stop, he wrapped his arms around himself and drew his knees tight against them. Sweat beaded on his forehead as he tried to calm himself by rocking back and forth in the corner of the room. He attmepted to steady his breathing, but was distracted by the faint breeze from the vent above. Nothing seemed to work; only the counting kept his mind off his addiction.

     John's eyes darted around the bare white room, searching again for something to count. Something to distract his mind once more. Unable to find something new, he mentally began recalling his previous counts.

     54 seams in the padding on the floor, he thought silently.
     Same as the ones on the ceiling.
     15 ribs on on the 3 door hinges.
     5 per hinge.
     62 wires in the window on the door.
     20 vertical, 42 horizontal.
     23 times someone has passed by my room.
     4 times was Dr. Tsung, the one who admitted me.


     His eyes fell upon the clock outside his room. 7:07:30 PM. John had checked himself into rehab at 10 AM the day before. The numbers began working through in his head again. 1 day, 9 hours, 7 minutes and 30 seconds... 33 hours, 7 minutes, 30 seconds... 2012 minutes and... The minute hand suddenly made a resounding click. +1...
    Posted by spiritualcoma on 2009-10-13 01:10:29 | Rating: | Views: 79
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Oh My...this is very good. Addiction is such a cunning enemy of life...
Posted by  Olla  on 2009-10-13 01:26:20 
  
My friend you absence has done nothing to diminish your skills. This was outstanding. Good to see you back... Hope you stick around a while....

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Posted by  Evetspordlaw  on 2009-10-13 08:44:44 
  
Olla - Thank you for the compliment. I agree with what you said, and sadly, too many people suffer from it's grasp.

E - Coming from you, I am humbled. It feels good to be back.. and back to scribbling as well. This could have been better, but maybe it'll help me get back into the groove of things. See you around.
Posted by  spiritualcoma  on 2009-10-13 10:19:40 
  
Welcome back. An excellently oblique take on the challenge, well delivered.
Posted by  Perigo_Minas  on 2009-10-13 12:05:50 
  
Very good spin on the Challenge. Welcome back.
Posted by  cabinfever  on 2009-10-13 15:32:42 
  
still got your chops.. Good take!
Posted by  pastormike  on 2009-10-13 23:43:24 
  
Thanks ya'll for the warm welcome and the positive comments. Am looking forward to having a go at future challenges... maybe even catch up on the ones I've missed.
Posted by  spiritualcoma  on 2009-10-14 00:10:51 
  
Excellent job!! Addiction does wicked things to the mind. I can feel his anxiety...
Posted by  purpleflowersbyth...  on 2009-10-14 13:42:32 
  
Nice take.
Posted by  stevehayes13  on 2009-10-14 21:16:30 
  
Purple - as short as this piece is, I'm glad to hear I was still able to convey the emotions. Thank you

Steve - Thanks as well, good to hear you liked it.
Posted by  spiritualcoma  on 2009-10-14 21:21:43 
  
Wonderful to see you back, SC. And back with a bang! Well done!
Posted by  BootLady  on 2009-10-16 10:36:27 
  
Thanks Boot! Feels good to challenge myself again, and look forward to more in the future.
Posted by  spiritualcoma  on 2009-10-16 10:55:34 
  
WOW! That was amazing, not to mention a nice "twist" on the whole 2012 thing!
Posted by  Wheresmycoffee  on 2009-10-17 06:45:06 
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