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We're not normal
this feels so unreal
the way you stare
the way I feel
No one else is here
Just you and me
You touch my back so casually
It's so extreme
I turn we kiss
no one else on earth exists
Is this a dream?
Do you feel the same,
or is this just a play
that we've been acting out everyday
Are we on the same page are we on the same scene?
Are we in this together or is this a sceme? To hurt me, to taunt me, to teach me to feel....
Are we both in this, is our love real?
Am I just being needy, am I overreacting
This fetish is becoming distracting
You love me I know it,
by all means you show it
I love you; I know it.
I've never loved anyone else
I've been selfish and kept my love to myself
But I gave it to you and if there comes a time when you don't want it
That will be the end my heart will be haunted.
We have so much passion, it keeps us in suspense
I didn't know love was this Intense |
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Posted by myveryownsoapopera on 2008-05-29 18:32:52 | Rating: | Views: 58
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good work. i love your stuff.
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Posted by JoshWasHere
on 2008-05-29 21:33:43
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Wow... I really like it...*forwards link to boyfriend* The only [constructive] criticism I would have for you is the rhythm...the structure of the poem is the second most important thing in a poem, only after strong word choice that still expresses your true feeling and self. Like the word choice, it is what helps the reader understand what you're trying to say and how you're trying to say it. It's a little unorganized, but really great job. Love the last four lines.
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Posted by signed_becca
on 2008-06-02 18:22:54
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