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Mystery man a story part 2
(please read part 1 first   http://www.thoughts.com/missmarie/blog/mystery-man-a-story-i -will-always-be-with-you-69388/ )

As he stood over her still, sleeping body, he couldnt get the memories of the bath out of his mind, but he was begining to feel this overpowering urge to protect her, and, as she lay there breathing softly into the dark, a wave of mixed emotions began to overwealm him, before tonight, he wasnt sure where he fitted into her life, i guess somewhere in his mind, David believed that one day he and Marie would be together, one way or another, the thoughts he had about her in his life, were destined to always be that way, just thoughts, dreams, how can he tell her now that it can never be?, will he still be able to comunicate with her?, is there a way to get into her head while she slept?, as he seemed to have done moments after his fall, he needed to figure out his new purpose, some things seemed to be falling into place in his head, others weren't making much sence as yet,
It was a warm night, and she had fallen asleep in her robe, which she had struggled out of in a sleeping fit, obviously dreaming, he wished he knew where her mind was at that moment, he had felt guilty at that point, was he in some guardian position on her life now, was he abusing that by thinking of her in this way, and will those thoughts eventually vanish as if never thought?
The room started to melt away, he wasn't panicked, it seemed perfectly natural to him, although it had never happened before, he was at ease as if it had many times.
Standing in the clearing, it seemed to be springtime in the woodland area he had visited so many times with Marie before, and as he glanced around, there she stood, wide eyed, naked as eve, smiling up at him, like an old friend out of the blue, he contained his smiles, and pushed any guilty thoughts to the back of his mind, 'what am i suposed to be doing?' puzzled, he took her hand and began to walk through the woods, she was glancing around, looking pleased, when suddenly she came to a stop, she was staring, intently at a small Daisy poking its head through the thick grass, she turned her attention to David, "Do you think it is time yet? dare i?" she asked him with such hope in her big grey eyes, "Why don't you try it and see" he felt an uncontrolable smile spread across his face, he knew, now he had passed, that the scent would be there for her, and he felt excitement at the thought of her happiness, and he wasn't disapointed, and neither was she, he watched as she leant forward, plucked the tiny flower from the ground and lifted it towards her face, she inhailed deeply, and as she turned to him, smile spreading across her face, she started to fall away from him, as if being pulled by some invisable force, the flower fallling from her hand fell slowly to the ground, her hands and arms outstreached towards him, calling for him, he put his arms toward her, trying to catch her, but she was too far away, he couldn't hear her, but he knew there was a scream, her face twisted, filled with anguish...
He found himslef in the dark, dazed and confused, nothing around him accept a lone, wilting flower,lying on the ground, there were tears straming down his cheeks, they stang, the first physical pain he reacalled feeling in this world, he knew deep down she was safe, what he didn't know of course, was he?.
He began searching, through the darkness, he had no idea how to get anywhere, asuming it was something he needed to learn by himself he considered using the techniques he had learned in his life, maybe meditation, praying to be where he desired, maybe that would work, in the end he tried everything he could think of, in the end he found himself running faster, and faster through the darkness, getting nowhere fast, was this hell? what was this place? and why did he have no knowledge of any thing at all.
Falling to his knees, he could no longer control the tears, 'this is wrong' he thought, 'this is more than wrong, maybe i was wrong, i don't know where i am or what is happening to me...WHERE AM I?????????" he shouted louder than he ever had before, there was nothing, no echo, no response, he lay on the ground, sobbing, feeling numb.
He must have fallen asleep, when he awoke, he was blinded by the light around him, he rubbed his eyes, still wet from the tears, as he did so, things began to clear, in front of him and in his head, he knew what was happening, he knew why, the only thing left to do was find Marie, and tell her, tell her everything..
No sooner had he decided what to do he was there, in her room exactly as earlier, she was lying in her bed, sleeping deeply, but there were tear stains on her face, this saddened him deeper than he could imagine.
Sitting down beside her on the bed, he knew, the only way to prove his theory, he lifted his hand from his lap, paused for a moment, then moved it toward Marie's sleeping body, he brushed her cheek gently, with the back of his hand, then cupped the same cheek, using his thumb to remove the last tear drops, he smiled to himself, this smile at the touch of her soft skin, soon turned to tears, flooding, uncontrolable tears at the realisation of his fate.
He watched her for what seemed like hours, although it was probably only minutes, as she stirred from sleep, his smile returned, her head rolled in his direction as her eyes began to open slightly, she smiled as she noticed him, and then a double take sat her bolt upright, her arms flung around his neck, "but how..?" she declared when she finally losened her grip on him, " i'm sorry Marie, you are still sleeping and i don't know how much time i have left with you"
"I don't understand" she said, her voice breaking slightly as the sadness began to return
"Have either of us understood any of this since the begining?" he atempted to laugh "I thought i knew what this was, but i fear, i was wrong, and now i am unsure weather i will ever see you again"
this time there was no fighting the tears, she would finally see how much he had been hurting from the outset, she held him again, she held him so tight that she thought she would never be able to let go.
In that moment, they both felt the same thing, pulling away from her embrace, he looked into those grey eyes and she looked into his, it felt as though there was a spike of electricity pulcating through them both, he leaned towards Marie, slowly and calmly he rested his lips to hers and they kissed for what seemed like an eternity, this electrifying charge bolting through their veins, hearts pounding as if they might burst, they, again, held each other so tightly, the kiss becoming more passionate and breathless by the second,
Marie pulled away, a look of panic on her face, she felt the tears, she was showered in his upset, it was her this time wiping tears from his face, he seemed to be breaking down comletely, " i don't want to go back" he sobbed " i was so unhappy in my life i...i .."
"shhhh" Marie whispered " you say you have to go and that i may never see you again, tell me, where are you going?"
the words would not come, was there something that was trying to prevent all this becoming reality, why could he not tell her?, he thought he might scream " I have to go back, i was wrong, i obviously don't belong here, with you"
A solitary tear ran down Marie's cheek, it landed on the back of Davids hand, he leant forward and placed a kiss on her face where the tear had left a path
" I wish i could stay here...with you Marie.....I wish there was some way i could find you in reality, as i fear that may be where i am headed to, i can't stay, i can feel it, the time has come"
"I don't understand" pleaded Marie, "why cant you tell me? please stay here, i need you....I ..I love you David"
She clung to him, like a child not wanting to be left by its mother, "Marie" he replied " I have no control, i want to stay i promise, i will try to find you Marie, don't think that i will ever stop thinking about you, i will think about you every day" he held her, but he could hear a strange noise, this is it, its time, he knew, the noise wasn't coming from Marie's room, it seemed to be coming from the back of his mind....
"David?.....Are you ok.."
He couldn't hear her anymore, she was the distant sound now, he looked into her fading eyes once more,
"Marie... I love you too" but it was too late, she was sat alone, he had gone, she never heard those last three words.

As David began to open his eyes, he was afraid of where he might be now, he was afraid that his instincts were right, and, as his eyes cleared, he looked around the hospital ward, he saw the policeman sitting next to his bed, then the pain in his head started to ache at the noises coming from the monitors that seemed to be attatched to him,and he flinched....
"Mr Macenzie? my name is D.I Field, do you remember what happened..........................






ok so there will be a part 3 he he






Posted by missmarie on 2008-04-26 11:08:18 | Rating: | Views: 227


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Posted by
bubblydi
on 2008-04-26 11:20:34
 
You really have outdone yourself this time marie.
This is like a book you can not put down.
Your imagination is wonderful.
Please don't let it be too long efore the next part.
WOW. xxx
 
 

Posted by
DifficultSoul
on 2008-04-27 03:05:28
 
speechless
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-04-27 12:36:22
 
Aww Diane, thank you, please nag me about part 3 or else it wont get written, thank you for all your encouragement, and your kind words xxxx
love you Diane xx
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-04-27 12:37:04
 
Miss J, Speachless? i thought we wern't alowed to be speachless he he
love you x
 
 

Posted by
tonyrayhutchison
on 2008-04-27 12:45:27
 
missmarie this is beautiful. you really have a wonderful talent. Write more soon, please!!
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-04-27 14:30:13
 
Ok Tonyray, if you insist he he

thank you xxxx
 
 

Posted by
Nubian
on 2008-04-27 20:57:07
 
I went back and read Part I & II.... I agree with bubblydi this is so addictive and I could not stop reading it. I could really see what you were describing! Wonderful post, Missmarie
 
 

Posted by
erica3
on 2008-04-28 17:00:04
 
My head is spinning fromt his marie. this is brilliant! i was completley sucked into this story as if i was in the story watching it while it was all happening. i could feel the emotions both were feeling because of your words. Well done missmarie! :)
 
 

Posted by
spiritualcoma
on 2008-04-28 18:34:01
 
this is great marie! well done, can't wait for more :)
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-04-28 19:12:45
 
thanks guys, i can't believe i left it hanging again ha ha now i have to do part 3..i'm really enjoying it to be honest, thanks for taking the time to read me
love you mwahh xx
 
 

Posted by
circe
on 2008-04-28 23:02:52
 
ohhhh! Missmarie, you have captured a piece of my imagination and you won't let it go. And the sweet notes of "my heart will go on" Titanic theme actually makes this hurt. A cousin of my grandmother's was a victim of the Titanic. I heard about him a few times growing up, but not until the movie did it hit home.
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-04-30 12:51:13
 
Circe, thank you, i hope it didnt hurt to much, x x
 
 

Posted by
circe
on 2008-04-30 23:53:05
 
Of course it was 1912, I have only seen pictures. But add music and it can make your heart break.
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-05-01 07:27:15
 
That is very true Circe, but at the same time it must be quite amazing to have a personal link to such a well documented event in history.
I was tempted not to put celine on this post, as i am not really a fan, but it was the only song that really fitted, perhaps part 3 will have a happier ending so the music may be more upbeat lol although knowing me it may not be x
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-05-03 08:04:17
 
Thanks Greenersky, i will definately keep writing, i want to know how it ends! ;)
 
 

Posted by
ColoradoDreamin
on 2008-05-04 19:07:33
 
I read Part I again and then read Part II for the first time. I agree with the other comments. Your brilliant writing draws the reader into the world of your characters and never lets go. As my heart was racing the end came all to quickly and I was left to wonder what the next chapter holds. Can't wait for Part III. You have a best seller on your hands, my dear. How lucky that I'm reading it hot off the presses as it is written. Peace.
 
 

Posted by
missmarie
on 2008-05-07 12:39:32
 
Thanks Colorado, i am working on part three now xx
 
 


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