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We are walking through the forest, the leaves a soft blanket under our feet.  There is a crispness in the air, a scent of change.  I shiver, my bare nipples harden.  He says he will go, get food, bring me gifts.  But there are trees here, fruit within my reach.  I can get my own gift.  Before I can say so, he is gone.  I will wait for his return.  I'm not that hungry.

I curl beneath this tree, the fruit ripe and pungent.  I nestle into the fallen leaves, finding warmth where the sun has heated them half the day.  I sleep.  I don't know how long I've slept when I awaken.  The sun has shifted in the sky, the leaves are cold, cling to my bare skin.  He hasn't returned.  I begin to be hungry.

I stand, brush the leaves from me, turn to find him, the other.  He plucks the fruit from the tree under which I slept.  He smells it, holds it out to me.  I shiver again, but not from cold.

"Here.  It is delicious to the taste, and very desirable."

"I wll not partake.  I will die if I do."

"You will not die.  You will be like a god, knowing truth."

"No, I will die."

"No, you will know truth."

I take the fruit.  It is heavier, denser than I imagined.  There is a sharpness to the smell.  The skin is thin, transparent, white.  I weigh my thoughts, my options.  Adam will return, he will have food.  That hunger will be fed.  Even if I die, is that not worth truth?

I bite into the flesh of the fruit.  It is delicious, as he said.  It drips light, its juice, light and knowledge.  I lick it from my hands.  The aftertaste though is bitter, like poison.  This will not kill me today, but I taste my death, feel it enter me.

I turn, face him.  I know him now, know this too--truth is worth the daily deaths we die to know it.

    Posted by lynbarnes on 2009-11-03 02:29:52 | Rating: | Views: 99
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taking of the forbidden fruit -
i wonder if it's a metaphor for something else though.
Well written - the pinnacle moment in the bible - that would have man looking down on women for evermore...
Posted by  Acinerov  on 2009-11-03 02:36:26 
  
But she knew having truth was worth it. Is worth it.
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-03 02:48:10 
  
How poetic your story is. I most liked you placing yourself in that scene that took place five thousand years ago. And just like then you took a bite of the fruit, and in doing so you have understood the taste of death. Now I only question you this:
Knowing that the fruit is forbiden, and knowing what your fate will be for tasting the fruit, would you truely in this life take that first bite?
Posted by  jwcj  on 2009-11-03 02:37:28 
  
um, I don't believe it's literal. And knowledge is worth the daily little deaths we die to get it.

But probably not. I'm a chicken.
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-03 02:43:18 
  
I don't think that you are a chicken. In fact, I know you are anything but a coward Ms. Barnes. Just a little precipitious on the odd occasion.
Posted by  desinq  on 2009-11-03 02:48:55 
  
Precipitious, but not too fractious, hopefully.
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-03 22:48:57 
  
You must have a bottomless well of talent. You certainly never cease to amaze this simple mind! That was wonderful!
Posted by  Wheresmycoffee  on 2009-11-03 04:15:50 
  
**blush** Thanks.
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-03 22:49:22 
  
What a coup of an idea my dear friend! I am the one jumping up and down yelling bravo!
Posted by  greunie  on 2009-11-03 07:42:01 
  
Non-conformists-R-me
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-03 22:49:59 
  
Astonishing. I always wonder what you will create next, and never get it right.
Posted by  Perigo_Minas  on 2009-11-03 11:27:10 
  
Sure sign of an unbalanced mind?
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-03 22:50:37 
  
Excellent. Thanks.
Posted by  vestigesofhermind  on 2009-11-03 18:35:29 
  
Thank you.
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-03 22:50:58 
  


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Ha, ha!
Posted by  bloodintheeyes  on 2009-11-03 21:00:13 
  
And it was good....

Still is....

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Posted by  Evetspordlaw  on 2009-11-03 23:59:54 
  
thanks.....
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-04 18:18:58 
  
this was some pretty good soft-core read.

my bare nipples harden

but I taste my death, feel it enter me.

It is delicious to the taste, and very desirable
Posted by  bloodintheeyes  on 2009-11-04 11:19:01 
  
If that's the meaning you want to assign. Mostly physiological response to cold, not always the other.

Glad it got you off?
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-04 18:21:07 
  
My youngest daughter is writing a paper about Freuds theory, (the id and the superego) She had to choose a character from the cat in the hat...(she decided to write about the fish)....sorry, I digress, this story rememinds me of his theory.
You are so very talented!
Posted by  roe  on 2009-11-04 11:30:05 
  
I have issues with Freud. But I see the compliment. Thanks.
Posted by  lynbarnes  on 2009-11-04 18:22:18 
  
Nice take on the challenge!
Posted by  consciousentity  on 2009-11-04 22:17:24 
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