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its called In The Night
this is only the first chapter so u have ot let me know wat you think!
As I got on the plane on my way to alaska to live with my mother, my father told me for what felt like the four-hundreth time that day that I didn’t have to go. “I’ll be fine” I said. “I really need to do this”. I mean I did want to go, and meet my mother, and get to know her better, but I couldn’t help but feel gulity for leaving him to defend for himself. I mean I was going from my safe little town in Syracuse, New York to the town of Juno, Alaska to live with a mother I barely knew. But I was doin it as sortof like a social exile, I wanted a way to start my life over, I wanted a change and I thought that this was the best way to do it. Then my father was gone and I was on the plane. I had visited my mother a few times before this, but this was going to be different. I could just feel it, something very important was going to happen.
As my plane touched the ground, I felt two totally different emotions at the same time. The first was general excitement, to see what would be my new home, my new life and to see my mother. But as I did see her, I felt a twinge of depression as I saw my mother waving at me. It wasn’t hard to notice her, she was beyond beautiful. I honestly didn’t know at times how I was her daughter sometimes. She was beautiful, with her long curly red hair just below her shoulders, with her ivory skin, and truly lovely green eyes.She was an average size woman, in her thirdies. Where as I had taken more of the look of my father, with his dark brown hair, I mean it was curly like hers, but my eyes were blue like my dads.like my father I was very tall, I stood 5’9 and I was was on the slender side like my mom but I did have curves. As I walked up to my mom, she ran to meet me and gave me a huge hug. I went a stiff as a board, and din’t hug her back, see I was like my father, he liked to not show his emotions either. But if my mother was offended, she didn’r show it. So we walked to her car, and boy was I glad I was wearing my sweater under my new coat, because it was freezing. I was going to have a lot to get used to around here. The good part about my mom, or Alice as my dad called her, was once she figured out I wanted to come live with her, she actually got all of my svhool stuff taken care of for me, I would be starting school the naxt day. When we got to the house, was goin to call my home, I noticed a nice red Jeep with a bow on top sitting in the driveway. Alice turned and smiled at the look of surprize on my face. She said to me “I wanted you to be happy here, so I figured I’d get you your own car so you don’t have to drive around this heap”. I was totally and completely speechless. So all I could think of to say was “thank you” and we got my bags and headed for the house......
theres more to it but i just wanted to give you a little taste of wat im writing, if u wanna read more, please leave comments please!
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Posted by lalissa1128 on 2008-10-07 12:09:48 | Rating: | Views: 36
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I want to read through the chapters, but I have to start at the beginning! So far it sounds good.
Wonder where its going to lead!?!?!
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Posted by erintrevino
on 2008-10-13 15:37:57
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it one of those thing, like were it stops nobody knows, when i feel its finished it will be.. :)
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Posted by lalissa1128
on 2008-10-13 20:07:12
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Hi Lalissa,
Told you I'd read it :) So here I am, I'll work my way through, I noticed it was up to chapter 16 ! Fantastic. Means I don't have to wait. Lol.
Sounds great, only thing I'd suggest is doing it in Word first so it picks up the spelling or typos. But don't let that deter you, it's good a really strong foundation. Can't wait to read the next chapter :)
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Posted by EasyToSay
on 2008-10-30 15:48:59
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