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Poem about the day I nearly drowned on the Snake R
"Downstream Havoc"

Watching the shore move slowly by,
Still, I rowed on mouth getting dry.
Arms getting as heavy as the oars,
Sweat streaming from my pores.
The river continuing on endlessly,
Still, keep on rowing.

Muscles churning,
Back breaking,
Sun bearing down on me.
Breath gasping,
Body crying,
Still, keep on rowing.

Relief in sight.
A long stretch of river,
Buried in white.
Finally, I moved over the lid,
Shooting the rapid.
Nothing to stop me now,
Still, keep on gliding.

Diving through waves,
Approaching the spot,
A large whirlpool-like fissure.
I yelp and want to miss her.
Watching the boat tip,
Tipping to the limit,
Hoping it will stop,
But not a bit.
Still, it keeps on tipping.

Surrounded by near darkness,
Trying to get out of this mess,
I catch a glimpse.
The boat above and immense.
Suspended under the river,
Beginning to quiver,
At last, I see the sky.
But, keep on drowning.
Posted by QuickHitGondolin on 2008-02-13 10:36:03 | Rating: | Views: 63


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Posted by
roe
on 2008-02-13 11:49:26
 
was this a downstream dream?
 
 

Posted by
greensky
on 2008-02-14 13:14:33
 
Nice poem Q/H Sounds frightning mate
Roedownstreamdream (Good name Roe)lol
 
 

Posted by
QuickHitGondolin
on 2008-02-14 16:55:15
 
Not a dream. It was when my big brother (Casa Say, Social Advocates for Youth), David, took me there in a Stanford alumni group and we shot the rapids in dories with Grand Canyon Dories outfitters. David graduated from Stanford with a computer science degree. It was scary right after the incident, but I forgot about it by dinnertime.
 
 

Posted by
necronomincon
on 2008-03-09 05:39:56
 
vivid and stiring,i went white water rafting on a school trip for 8th and 9th grade,scary but i like it
 
 


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