This is really good. The raw emotion of her disaterous life totally jumps off the page.

Uh Huh, and your (vantage) point is? LOL I am kidding you Evets! We, most of us, do things when we are younger that we wouldn't, if we knew then what we know now...
And no, I never took off my clothes for money.

Well written brother.

Excellent!!! E, this is totally right up my alley. No I can't personally relate (thank God) but I feel the emotion and I love that it's so simple yet so deep. Keep it up babe, did I mention I LOVE this?

PS. I'm having a Pearl Jam session right now :]

E I had just signed off when I saw this post on thoughts main page, so I read it. I had to log back in so I could respond. E I can't tell you how much this has impacted my life. I had to go into a stripe join to stop one of my nieces from performing. I refused to leave until she left with me. It has been fifteen years now, and I thought the memory had been long erased. I have been sitting here for the last half hour crying. Not your fault E just memories of days long gone, but not for gotten.

Nice post E. Really well written, and strong.

Wow, The emotion, the description, the sound the smell the taste, wow.


Ohhh and if you are not sure by that, I love it



WOW

Good post man. Powerful.

WOW guys... I can not even tell you how happy I am to see this many different emotions come through on this work. It is actually the first of a three part... I am don with the second and think I may post it tonight... The third part is also done, but I am re looking it... I think you all know me and how I like to keep my stuff simple... Complex poetry looses some of its luster when it comes from my pen... I still enjoy working complex stuff, but the simple eb and flow of a story rhyme is something I very much enjoy to write and I love to have read... So in that light I will post the second part later today, then relook the third part one more time and get it out by the weekend's end...

Faith- The story get more disasterous...Thank You...

Circe- This poem has a bit of non-fiction in it... Just an experiance I had dealing with a young girl gone to stripping... I only knew her for about 20 mins and never saw her again... I am not sure how her life turned out, but I hope to this day it did not turn out like this story...

Wicked- I love to see you visit my work! I appreciate the nice comments and hope you enjoy the rest...

Smooth- Appreciate it brother.... Appreciate you reading my work....

Smiles- You know I thought of you when I was writing this, because I know this is the type of stuff you write... I hope you enjoy the rest...
Oh and me? >>> Taproot/Dreams

BigD- I am sorry to have resurfaces some bad experiances... This write is something i have carried in the back of my mind for a long time... I met a young girl many, many years ago... She was beautiful, young, lively, and stripping... I talked to her only for about 10 mins... When I was done we were both crying... I never saw her again... Given the town she lived in and the life she was leading I have little faith that her life progressed out of that hole...I know not a positive thought process... Anyway this is kind of about her, as my mind has thought of her exsistance since that day... I hope I am totally wrong, but this is what I got in my head and need to get it out.... There are few that go into this type of life that have someone who loves them as you do your niece and would rip her from the clutches of darkness... You my friend are a great man....

E2S- Than You very much...

KP- WOW I hit three senses? w00t! I am getting better! TY for your read....

Tony- Much appreciated brother....

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awsome post E! Very powerful. I loved it!

Ty You very much CG... I loved writing it....

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Thanks Blogger...

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Dear E,
Loved these poems..Raw emotions, if you haven't experienced this the depth of your feeling for other's shows through! Wow!

Thanks Deb... I just write... Never think my stuff is worth it, but you guys tell me I am wrong so because I enjoy writing and you all seem to enjoy reading, I continue to write... TY

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This is very good....

K

omg...i mite have just read this now..but i soooo love it..it just flows..and me being a poet my self...i just ..im inspired....i love the flow of the words.....its sweet..sincere....and magical...but with a bit of truth and emotion mixed in....ty for writing...

nicefrl... TY you for reading my write... If you read some of my comments on my series you know the background... If you liked these I would ask you to cehck out Molly... it is a three part series that started me in doing series...

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Lastblast, thank you very much...

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