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Shame
Her sequin dress,
Strewn across the stage...
It lies below,
Her suspended cage...
Where she dances,
Skimpily clad...
For men old enough,
To be her dad...
Her sensual body,
Snares their eyes...
Her hips are slender,
With delicate thighs...
The sweat rolls freely,
Between her breasts...
She accepts the whiskey,
During her rests...
She takes the stage,
Yet again,
Dancing the pole,
For all the men...
She wears stiletto heels,
Her red hair wild...
They do not care,
That she is just a child...
They grope and touch,
This beautiful girl...
She smiles a fake smile,
For all the world...
Never does she,
Fail to please...
With her blue eyes staring up,
While she is on her knees...
She receives their money,
For doing her thing...
Tens and Twenties slipped,
Behind her G-String...
If daddy only knew,
Her claim to fame...
Her family knows her as Angie...
The men here call her,
SHAME........
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Posted by Evetspordlaw on 2008-11-13 15:54:52 | Rating: | Views: 100
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This is really good. The raw emotion of her disaterous life totally jumps off the page.
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Posted by Faith
on 2008-11-13 16:09:10
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Uh Huh, and your (vantage) point is? LOL I am kidding you Evets! We, most of us, do things when we are younger that we wouldn't, if we knew then what we know now...
And no, I never took off my clothes for money.
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Posted by circe
on 2008-11-13 17:18:01
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Excellent!!! E, this is totally right up my alley. No I can't personally relate (thank God) but I feel the emotion and I love that it's so simple yet so deep. Keep it up babe, did I mention I LOVE this?
PS. I'm having a Pearl Jam session right now :]
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Posted by smileforthecamera
on 2008-11-13 20:17:34
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E I had just signed off when I saw this post on thoughts main page, so I read it. I had to log back in so I could respond. E I can't tell you how much this has impacted my life. I had to go into a stripe join to stop one of my nieces from performing. I refused to leave until she left with me. It has been fifteen years now, and I thought the memory had been long erased. I have been sitting here for the last half hour crying. Not your fault E just memories of days long gone, but not for gotten.
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Posted by bigd49
on 2008-11-14 01:09:55
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Nice post E. Really well written, and strong.
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Posted by EasyToSay
on 2008-11-14 03:55:24
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Wow, The emotion, the description, the sound the smell the taste, wow.
Ohhh and if you are not sure by that, I love it
WOW
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Posted by KP
on 2008-11-14 05:05:02
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Good post man. Powerful.
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Posted by Tony51203
on 2008-11-14 05:46:11
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WOW guys... I can not even tell you how happy I am to see this many different emotions come through on this work. It is actually the first of a three part... I am don with the second and think I may post it tonight... The third part is also done, but I am re looking it... I think you all know me and how I like to keep my stuff simple... Complex poetry looses some of its luster when it comes from my pen... I still enjoy working complex stuff, but the simple eb and flow of a story rhyme is something I very much enjoy to write and I love to have read... So in that light I will post the second part later today, then relook the third part one more time and get it out by the weekend's end...
Faith- The story get more disasterous...Thank You...
Circe- This poem has a bit of non-fiction in it... Just an experiance I had dealing with a young girl gone to stripping... I only knew her for about 20 mins and never saw her again... I am not sure how her life turned out, but I hope to this day it did not turn out like this story...
Wicked- I love to see you visit my work! I appreciate the nice comments and hope you enjoy the rest...
Smooth- Appreciate it brother.... Appreciate you reading my work....
Smiles- You know I thought of you when I was writing this, because I know this is the type of stuff you write... I hope you enjoy the rest...
Oh and me? >>> Taproot/Dreams
BigD- I am sorry to have resurfaces some bad experiances... This write is something i have carried in the back of my mind for a long time... I met a young girl many, many years ago... She was beautiful, young, lively, and stripping... I talked to her only for about 10 mins... When I was done we were both crying... I never saw her again... Given the town she lived in and the life she was leading I have little faith that her life progressed out of that hole...I know not a positive thought process... Anyway this is kind of about her, as my mind has thought of her exsistance since that day... I hope I am totally wrong, but this is what I got in my head and need to get it out.... There are few that go into this type of life that have someone who loves them as you do your niece and would rip her from the clutches of darkness... You my friend are a great man....
E2S- Than You very much...
KP- WOW I hit three senses? w00t! I am getting better! TY for your read....
Tony- Much appreciated brother....
E
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Posted by Evetspordlaw
on 2008-11-14 09:40:59
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awsome post E! Very powerful. I loved it!
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Posted by country_girl
on 2008-11-14 09:49:05
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Ty You very much CG... I loved writing it....
E
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Posted by Evetspordlaw
on 2008-11-14 10:23:14
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great post! i liked the ending
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Posted by thebloggerL
on 2008-11-14 10:40:19
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Thanks Blogger...
E
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Posted by Evetspordlaw
on 2008-11-14 10:52:43
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Dear E,
Loved these poems..Raw emotions, if you haven't experienced this the depth of your feeling for other's shows through! Wow!
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Posted by debthompson
on 2008-11-14 12:49:12
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Thanks Deb... I just write... Never think my stuff is worth it, but you guys tell me I am wrong so because I enjoy writing and you all seem to enjoy reading, I continue to write... TY
E
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Posted by Evetspordlaw
on 2008-11-14 15:33:57
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This is very good....
K
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Posted by lastblastkl
on 2008-11-15 21:13:48
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omg...i mite have just read this now..but i soooo love it..it just flows..and me being a poet my self...i just ..im inspired....i love the flow of the words.....its sweet..sincere....and magical...but with a bit of truth and emotion mixed in....ty for writing...
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Posted by nicegrl
on 2008-11-22 12:39:55
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nicefrl... TY you for reading my write... If you read some of my comments on my series you know the background... If you liked these I would ask you to cehck out Molly... it is a three part series that started me in doing series...
E
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Posted by Evetspordlaw
on 2008-11-22 21:26:06
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Lastblast, thank you very much...
E
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Posted by Evetspordlaw
on 2008-11-22 21:26:42
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