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I knew what I had done
as soon as the door closed
Changed --
the destiny of two lives
Me --
a 15 year old street dweller orphan
My Mother --
murdered at the hands of an angry husband
My Father --
shot dead in a police shoot out
My pregnancy --
unforeseen
The child --
a girl I named Hope
The door --
sizable and white in color --
matching the church steeple
The hand over --
to an elderly man of God --
Father Thomas
The reasoning --
the welfare of another over self
is love's way
The longing --
years of whispered prayers
for the sharer of my DNA.
Another white door --
opened by a young woman.
Me --
now 38,
found staring into my own eyes.
The embrace --
tearful, no words needed.
What I had done --
difficult, but with faith
in love's ability to open any door
Written By:
ColoradoDreamin
August, 2008
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Moving piece of writing! Great job!
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Posted by anotherdaze
on 2008-08-27 12:49:59
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Wow this is very powerful!! Amazing post once again!! Peace & love :)
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Posted by brlracincwgrl
on 2008-08-27 13:23:29
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Beautiful, as you are. Thanks, for this, and thanks for the gift of music.
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Posted by circe
on 2008-08-27 13:54:15
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Interesting way of showing the different views of a single event. Deep and powerful write; enjoyable read as I can relate to this.
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Posted by spiritualcoma
on 2008-08-27 19:40:49
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Wow. I just can't seem to find words right now, this was so powerful. Great job.
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Posted by country_girl
on 2008-08-27 23:21:24
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Your work of art here pulled my heart strings... I say work of art, because not only have you written an outstanding piece, you complimented it superbly with a sound effect that caused the emotion in the writing to become intensified... Excellent touch...
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Posted by Evetspordlaw
on 2008-08-28 00:57:58
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I read this yesterday too and thought it was great. You were very good at showing the emotion that the mother felt.
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Posted by prelude2it
on 2008-08-28 09:52:02
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So I had to read this a couple times to understand what was going on but once I figured it out I was absolutely winded. This is sooooo deep and beautiful. I can't believe you literally wrote a life story with only a few beautiful lines. Impressive.
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Posted by smileforthecamera
on 2008-08-28 14:22:59
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So simple. So raw. So perfectly crafted. Wow! Beautifully done!
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Posted by BootLady
on 2008-08-28 16:29:24
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Really beautiful and moving. My favourite hymn also just to make it perfect.
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Posted by overthehillandfar...
on 2008-08-28 17:43:18
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This is so artistic, a beautifully sculpted and powerful message brought deeper into my psyche by music playing on mye heart strings. Well thought out, short yet complete.
Well done! :) xxtantricxx
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Posted by tantrictouch
on 2008-08-28 18:02:08
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This has touched me deeply, for my own personal reasons. Well done
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Posted by KP
on 2008-08-28 19:02:05
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Wow.Lovely writing!
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Posted by HardThinker
on 2008-08-29 09:41:42
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Beautiful, just beautiful!!!
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Posted by slowtolearn
on 2008-08-29 10:21:48
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Masterful piece of freeform poetry and an emotionally captivating topic. :)
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Posted by DaizeeBlue
on 2008-09-03 08:48:49
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I agree with everyone. This is simply beautiful.
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Posted by EasyBev
on 2008-09-05 01:06:42
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wow... I really dont know what to say. I really enjoyed it, it coverd so much
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Posted by DouglasMB
on 2008-09-06 10:15:16
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